Helena mentioned that I use "ache" and "stare", so I thought I'd check on word frequencies -
- Pronouns: you 82; I 49; he 38; she 35; we 34; they 29
- Quantities: not/no/nothing 45; never 7; only 18; all 18
- Sky: night 13; star 4; sky 4; moon 6; horizon 3
- Vision: look 12; see 11; watch* 9; eyes 8; stare 5
- Misc: first 11; still 10; fall* 9; old 7; love 7; bridge 6; touch 6; time 6; blue 6; poetry 3; ache/aching 2
I hadn't noticed that "you" was so much more common than "I". No other surprizes. Below are my aches and stares. Colours too, because they loom large.
The dustless silence is aching|
to mean more
as waterlily-buds ache inches clear|
of fixing fluids before opening
"ache" seems more to do with desire than pain.
because she’s beautiful
and the incubator dials will start moving
|the hurt stares of old anglers|
|Stare, and slowly pale visions will appear|
|A merchant and his wife on the riverbank stare out at us.|
|I can see the legless man’s still staring through the gate|
As his eyes half open they’re staring|
straight at me
Yep, there's quite a lot of staring, not all of it accusatory.
dragging colour from stained glass
|Nile crocodiles are colourblind, they can’t see blue|
Cities aren’t grown villages or underground maps|
that lose their colours in the night
|their eyes the colour of your footprints.|
Colour seems to be a detachable property. My favourite colour's blue.